1) I really like it, 28 years later.
2) It's not a book
3) It's uncomfortably personal
I think the only way I was able to pass it around to friends, back then, was to completely forget what I'd written. Can I post it here? Should I post it here? If my children find their way here, will it make them more nervous than they already are?
So, tomorrow, I think I'll start patching in the less cringe-worthy bits. In the meantime, I also found the poem I wrote and then read at my brother's wedding, and I will post that, because I still really like it, even though the Merwin influence is enough to whack you over the head and drag you into a cul de sac:
Legend
This is where the legend starts
And the moon, reflected in any river, mirrors
the face of the one you will love
longer than memory
Longer than the tail of the wind
caught in the trees at the river's edge
This is where fire begins
And the name you write in sand
that cannot be erased by water
will be the last name you hear
This is where the last time
We said goodbye is sleeping still
And what words we couldn't find
Lie awake beside it, counting stars
I tell you this
As if we were children
I'm sending this to Jay Darling. It might break his heart....
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